Sunday, June 12, 2011

And Still He Said...


And still he said:

I love you

I love you

I love you.

Shut Up! I yelled

I ordered him back to his grave.

He stood straight and tall,

His body challenging my determination

But his ebony eyes betrayed his hurt.

I met his gaze, as much as I wanted to look away.
           
Finally his eyes dropped and he walked towards the door.

But before he left, he looked at me, his eyes piercing my soul and said:

I love you

I love you

I love you.

I turned away,

I couldn’t handle his gaze,

But,

He’s the blood-sucking monster,

So why am I the heartless one?

3 comments:

  1. ><" why is this so good.

    is this part of something larger or a stand alone? (if there's more, I WANT TO READ IT) =] <3

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  2. Right now it's stand alone, but I think I need a beginning. What do you think?

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  3. it's really good, i especially like how while the guy could be literally heartless, figuratively, the girl (or other guy, it could be either haha) is displayed as the 'heartless' one =]

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